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I've been trying to put together a one line pitch for days. Either my startup sounds too complicated or too simple. People automatically compare my startup to other websites.

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I have this to say about the one line pitch. It must be one line and...it must be a pitch. – DJClayworth Sep 27 '12 at 15:29
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You might want to check out this: techcrunch.com/2010/11/03/… Unusually helpful from TechCrunch. – user19878 Sep 27 '12 at 18:01

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May be something like this:

"I'm with ___________, a ____________ company; we (what you do) ______________."

So that it could sound like this:

"I'm with Instagram, a software company; we enable people to add visual filters to their pictures and then share them with others."

"I'm with Facebook, an online social networking company; we connect people with their friends."

"I'm with Google, an online search engine; we help people find the best webpage for what they're looking for." OR "I'm with Google, an online advertising company; we help advertisers connect with people who are searching for what they sell."

"I'm with Ford, a car company."

I think the most important part of a a one-line pitch should be the "what you do part" because if you're an innovative startup (and who isn't these days?) then people may not understand what you do from the kind of company you are (see Ford example). Overall, the goal should just be to give people an idea of what you do, nothing more, so that your pitch becomes a conversation opener. I think the reaction you should strive to get with your one-line pitch should be "How do you do that?"

Good luck.

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what you think about this pitch?? ______ where users can organize entertainment-related job hiring process, media, and events; making it accessible for artists, professionals, and fans to find on the web systematically. – zapoo Sep 27 '12 at 22:19
Isn't it more than 1 line? Are you an "online job portal, we help artists find jobs"? Just guessing based on what you wrote. Or may be you're an "online entertainment portal; we connect artists and people to entertainment venues." – frenchie Sep 27 '12 at 22:26
Yes, we are allowing users to organize jobs opportunities (can hire on site), media (music, video from the web) and events (to attend) for easy access for fans, professionals, and artists – zapoo Sep 27 '12 at 22:26
Well then are you an "online entertainment portal that connects entertainment professionals, artists and fans"? – frenchie Sep 27 '12 at 22:27
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ok, good luck with scaling your business. If you're in the pitching phase, take a look at this question: answers.onstartups.com/questions/40797/… What would be impressive isn't going to be your idea, your pitch or even your site; what would be impressive would be saying something like "we've been live for 3 months and we've signed-up 300 artists and more than half have found gigs through our portals; and now venues are signing-up everyday and revenues are coming in." It's the execution that will set you apart. Hope your business grows! – frenchie Sep 28 '12 at 0:09
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"I'm with __ and we (state the problem you solve as it pertains to them)" It is not enough to say what you do. You have to tell the problem you solve. Alternatively, you can state what you do in a quirky way. For instance, I am in a business group and we had a chiropractor come to a meeting. When I introduced myself, he replied, "My name is __ and I am a spinal maintenance technician." I immediately asked what he meant by that. I was engaged at that point. Pure, simple, marketing genius.

Whatever you say, you want the person to be lead to a follow-up question. I have always referred to what you are asking as an "elevator pitch". You find yourself in an elevator with your ideal target market, what would you say to them? If you just say your name and what you do, the most frequent response would be, "Nice to meet you." and then they stare at the door waiting for it to open. You want to avoid that. How can you do that with your product or service?

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ABC Corporation provides “Category”, solutions to “Target Customer”, for “Purpose”, which allows them to “Benefit”, by leveraging unique “Technology”.

Source: Tom Fountain from Mayfield Fund, a speaker at Stanford Business I watched on YouTube.

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